I need some opinions about my first shortfilm

[JMVadell]

Hello, first sorry if my english is not very well, i'm actually improving thisone

then, only I need some opinion of may latest (and first) 3d animation shortfilm "LA OPRESIÓN" (The Oppression). Thisone has been posted on a www.nontzefilm.com (it's a shortfilm festival) also you can visit may personal web (it's a temporary web, under construction) in thisone there is a link to the shortfilm: http://webs.ono.com/bejorro

Thank you very much!

[jdgill]

You speak your english fine...or type it I mean :p.

Looks great...does it have that many swear words though. It could be soemthing funny for kids to watch but with all the swear words it wouldn't be the best thing to show kids.

[JMVadell]

Thank you for your response.

Well, I think the children, nowadays, are accustomed to this "swear words", nevertheless I didn't want to do a children shortfilm, but I understand the short aesthetic is a little simple and thisone could look like for children

Finally, a lot of thanks!

[jdgill]

I can see why you say that they are accomstomed to it...but you shouldnt relly promote it:p. But it is very good...I would download it and keep it, but my parents would make me delete it because of the swear words written everywhere, its fine though:p.

[MechIDsh]

thats a good "1st short film" ....:cool: :D :cool:
but take in mind the "bad word" comment;)

[JMVadell]

the starring of my shortfilm THE OPPRESSION

http://webs.ono.com/bejorro

[eric]

hi. if this is your first animation then its really good. i think you got the camera angles rigth and also you really brougth the character to life. how did you do the animation. i mean did you use character animation? and whats the specs of the computer you used?

[jdgill]

I like the pose and all in the poster...the poster will do great.

[JMVadell]

thanks for the comments

I used MAYA 5.0 for the production, Photoshop, Afer Effects and Premiere for the postproduction.

I don't remember what kind of computer i used, i think that was a dual pentium but i'm not sure. The short film is a master MAISCA final project, i started the production of the short on september 2004 and finished the post-production of thisone on december 2004.

Regards,

[Diatrex]

Hey im new, but i saw your animation a pair of weeks ago. I think its goos, but i 'd like to see a character more worked, well... i used 3D Max but i dont know how to use the biped, maybe can u help me :p.

[NWH1983]

Very funny. I enjoyed it. Very good for your first short. Bravo!!

[Junlya]

I found the movie very good. It is very beautiful animated... :haha:

[JMVadell]

thanks for all responses!

I've just nominated in ESCAPE AWARDS!!

I'm finalist with another two guys with the farts 30 sec scene of my short film, in the AARDMAN awards...prrrff :halo: :)

this is the link:

http://www.escapestudios.co.uk/awards/

Wish luck me! :smug:

[JulesCopeland]

Nice one!

I really like it. The animation is really well done, you got loads of secondary action in there which really brought it to life.

If you want any constructive criticism, the only thing i would have changed was his facial expression when he realised that 'Mr Brown was at the window' ;P You could tell he looked worried, but i reckon it could have done with a little bit more expression.

Only a minor point, but you did ask...

In response to the earlier comments about it being too rude, i say *******. I think that people have this preconception that animation is a medium only for children, and you should only make nicey wicey fluffy bunny wabbits etc, but I think that people should be pushing the boundaries a bit more and making some really dark CGi stuff.

Good for you!

[jdgill]

I wasn't saying it was too rude. He could have toned down some on the swear words written everywhere, but besides that it was a great animation for a first! I definanteyl hope you win it! No I don't think that animation is supposed to be all fluffy and bunny crap. Heck, if they made action cgi movies I'd love em! I didn't mean to make a big deal about it...sry about that.

[Goig!]

Quite gross, to be sure; but well done nonetheless.