ATOMHAWK - 2D - wip - vnmribaya

[vnmribaya]

just a place holder, update comming sooooooon...

[vnmribaya]

here{s some idea, a prison complex in space, abandoned planet or somthing, or abandoned prison complex in space in abandoned planet, inside... atomhawk.... that sounds to much like alien 3??? i think... c&c welcome
more ideas to come soon, maybe some ancient alien complex or ruins.

cheers

[prosn]

nice idea bro....keep it up

[BiG ToE-3DT]

maybe something big far off in the distance, possibly in the sky. But I like what you got going now.

[hulahuga]

Very nice. Like your use of blending with the colors and the texture it gives :)

One thing you could think about is whether or not you actually want the horizon line in the middle, composition wise...

[vnmribaya]

thanks for the critiques guys, the are always wellcome, heres some adjusts, i'm not at home, soo. i´ve adjusted the horizont like hulahuga said, and some monster/alien/spirit in the back, like big toe requesteed, it gives more action to the scene i think, it is from another old drawing of mine, so i will redraw it with the wacom when i get home.
cheers

[hulahuga]

That spirit really adds to the story! :)

You might make him some sort of sand spirit that pours over everything... Since they seem to be on some sort of desert planet? Perhaps it is some sort of revenge?

[Kungfoowiz]

Looks super cool bro! =)

[vnmribaya]

thx for the comments guys, nice idea hulahuga, i wanted to do it a bit fuzzy in the back, with atmosphere, clouds and dust over it, so it might be made of sand and scrap i think...
i´ve added little portion of a dark space sky with some stars, just playing around, and one with a planet, what do think about it? it add some to the composition?
cheers

[elgama]

hi, the 1st thing that pops me out is that, foreground, mid-ground and background are sharing almost the same kind of values, you lose a lot of depth in the composition, try to separate the 3 main distances using this technic:

http://wiki.guildwars.com/images/b/bd/Thehuboftimeuj2.jpg

Kekai Kotaki does this wonderfully, you can check some examples at his blog.

Also the prison lights are grabbing too much attention, try to dim them a bit, maybe by adding some fog.

[hulahuga]

Glad you like it :)

Agreeing with elgama about the lights. They stand out a bit too much. Perhaps consider using more like light shafts and get a bit like light-dark-light-dark across the perspective, leading the eyes towards the sand monster. But I like the fact that you work with the smooth transitions, but that could come from the sand in a cool way :) But perhaps those towers are more like lighthouses, and in that case a large booming like like the one you have should be there...

Scrap and sand sound like a good combo, hinting towards buildings having been swept across previously...

Planet is a pretty nice idea. Not necessary though in my account. Try finding a good position for it and something that might create some creative light or form in the composition :)

[migroe]

the atmosphere is awesome! might turn out as a mega-epic sci-fi-poster :haha:
can't wait to see your next update!

[thedarkinker]

Looking cool, Adding the planet in the latest really works well :)

[vnmribaya]

here's some updatess, more to come soon, when i find more time to draw, lol
cheers

[Kungfoowiz]

Hey bro, looks like your stuff is developing here, liking the latest one more =) I particularly liked the font you used for Atomhawk too. Keep up the goodness =)

[yinteck]

This will be a great piece when its done. I like the second color, more decent to the eye. The red one seems to striking. just my thought

[vnmribaya]

here some update, its something wrong with the comp, i dont know, may be you can help me guys, help!!

[elgama]

hi, 1st of all, i like how u move the main char over to the bottom right, now he has the attention he deserves :) About the comp i think there are 2 main things that need to be fixed. 1st the bottom of the building clashes with 1 of the chars, making them as if they were part of the same plane. Also, as you can see, they share the same values, the monster also has this problem. So my solution would be: move the building to the left, darken then 1st guy a bit, and lighten the monster another bit. hope it helps,good luck

[Kungfoowiz]

Hey bro, my crit is less techy, would prolly just say you maybe need more of a main focus, the star of the show I guess, make him show up! =) Have a guud one =)

[yinteck]

Maybe removing the round planet on the left and shift the monster to the middle and make it larger. Just my thought. Hope the help my friend

[hulahuga]

Please post your final image here along with one wip image (details below taken from the rules on this and other final details) Thanks, Tom

4. At least 1 additional image must also be submitted showing the workings of your image, for example, a wire frame, steps of a 2d painting, or the photos of a matte painting. You must try to make it clear to the judges how your image was created.

5. All entries must be submitted to the final entries thread by Midnight GMT Friday April 15th 2011.

6. Initial judging will be carried out by 3DTotal staff and moderators to select the best 10 for each category. At this point Atomhawk will come on board to select the prize winners for each category.

Deadline extension - Monday 18th April 12.00 midday GMT

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[aby arty]

agree with elgama on moving building to the left. you could also scale down the building to show the hugeness ofthe monster. and also you could show monster being attacked from the air.

and yeah change the title font doesnt gel with ur image try an alienish font.

[vnmribaya]

here some, i have very little time so today a draw my best, thansks elgama, kungfoowiz, yinteck, hulahuga, and aby for your critiques, and advises... aby why your not in the comp?
good luck guys

[prosn]

It's looking great buddy....but i think you should change the subtitle colors, it's not coming out properly....also need some details on front character......I think you are working on that.....I know It will excellent work....caz you are rocking buddy..............keep it up :)

[Kungfoowiz]

Good luck bro! Have fun! =)

[hulahuga]

You should make it "Atomhawk - No one escapes" instead of that long one with no one scffapes....

[vnmribaya]

prosn, thanks man, i think u rigth with the color and the details but i run out of time, thanks for the comment sman.
Kungfoowiz, thanks man good luck for u too.
dr. hula, u right, see ur comment after i´ve posted the final so... but i corrected the scffapes, thanks for the comments, good luck

[washka]

Hi vnmribaya, I don't completly agree with judge's comment for this one, but they've got a point.
The athmosphere of your painting has got A LOT of drama, far more than second place winner imo.
There was a lot of good entries on this comp' but congrats for your great one!

[vnmribaya]

thanks man, i really appreciate your coments, and i hope to join the dominance and fight side by side... i´ve been with lots of work, but i hope come out with some concepts for this weekend.. see you in the other comp man
cheers

[Mr.rime]

good job . nice idea bro.