I need help to go further on in this animation !

ladokar · 07-04-2012, 01:06 PM

I've spent ages in this and that brought me frustration. I need feedback, somebody to tell me how to go further to guide me on out from my block, pleeeeeeeeeeez !

https://sites.google.com/site/ladoka...t-2d-animation

thanks in advance

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Umar6419 · 09-04-2012, 01:05 PM

Hey you are going great.,,, Add inbetweens

picpoc · 10-04-2012, 05:45 AM

hi, looks good to me though i'm no animator. On thing that kind of looks odd to me is that first camera move. I think the first shot could be wider to differentiate it from the second one. Also probably could add couple more cuts, camera changes, to keep the sequence dynamic.

ladokar · 14-04-2012, 09:02 PM

Thanks Umar6419, I will do so

picpoc, you're absolutely right it needs some more work to show coherence, I will work on that....thanks

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http://artistsdirectory.blogspot.com/

chubu · 15-04-2012, 06:46 PM

Hi ladokar!
overall its looking good. You should start adding inbetweens and work to make the shapes more clearly.

The only thing that really bothered me was the 1st few seconds when he says "listen to me!".
he taps on the back of the other character way too strong. If someone would tap my back like this I'll probably fall forward :-P .
I don't think tapping gently will suit the tone of his voice so I think if it was me doing this shot I'll probably looking for another idea for a gesture on this sentence.

again, overall it's look with a lot of potential and you should start adding more poses and decides on your arcs.
Good luck!

P.S
I agree with picpoc about the camera movement - although I'm not sure if you need more cuts. maybe just work more on the camera move will be good enough.

ladokar · 16-04-2012, 06:07 AM

Thanks Guy, you asked and you answered about the tapping, I will work more on the camera issue

I enjoyed surfing through your portfolio, keep up the good work !

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http://artistsdirectory.blogspot.com/

chubu · 18-04-2012, 03:56 PM

Thank you for the compliments, Don't forget to post here your progress! :-)

ladokar · 21-05-2012, 06:48 PM

Here is the new version after working more on the shots...wish to have good critiques
https://sites.google.com/site/ladoka...t-2d-animation

thanks in advance

07-04-2012, 01:06 PM	#1
ladokar Registered User Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 8 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	I need help to go further on in this animation ! I've spent ages in this and that brought me frustration. I need feedback, somebody to tell me how to go further to guide me on out from my block, pleeeeeeeeeeez ! https://sites.google.com/site/ladoka...t-2d-animation thanks in advance ___________________________________________ http://artistsdirectory.blogspot.com/

14-04-2012, 09:02 PM	#4
ladokar Registered User Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 8 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Thanks Umar6419, I will do so picpoc, you're absolutely right it needs some more work to show coherence, I will work on that....thanks ___________________________________________ http://artistsdirectory.blogspot.com/ Last edited by ladokar; 16-04-2012 at 05:28 PM..

15-04-2012, 06:46 PM	#5
chubu Stranger Join Date: Jun 2007 Posts: 257 Thanks: 1 Thanked 3 Times in 1 Post Awards Showcase Total Awards: 3	Hi ladokar! overall its looking good. You should start adding inbetweens and work to make the shapes more clearly. The only thing that really bothered me was the 1st few seconds when he says "listen to me!". he taps on the back of the other character way too strong. If someone would tap my back like this I'll probably fall forward :-P . I don't think tapping gently will suit the tone of his voice so I think if it was me doing this shot I'll probably looking for another idea for a gesture on this sentence. again, overall it's look with a lot of potential and you should start adding more poses and decides on your arcs. Good luck! P.S I agree with picpoc about the camera movement - although I'm not sure if you need more cuts. maybe just work more on the camera move will be good enough. __________________ My Portfolio: http://www.wix.com/guyzinger/myportfolio My blog: http://guyzinger.wordpress.com/ Last edited by chubu; 15-04-2012 at 06:48 PM..

16-04-2012, 06:07 AM	#6
ladokar Registered User Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 8 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Thanks Guy, you asked and you answered about the tapping, I will work more on the camera issue I enjoyed surfing through your portfolio, keep up the good work ! ___________________________________________ http://artistsdirectory.blogspot.com/ Last edited by ladokar; 16-04-2012 at 05:28 PM..

18-04-2012, 03:56 PM	#7
chubu Stranger Join Date: Jun 2007 Posts: 257 Thanks: 1 Thanked 3 Times in 1 Post Awards Showcase Total Awards: 3	Thank you for the compliments, Don't forget to post here your progress! :-) __________________ My Portfolio: http://www.wix.com/guyzinger/myportfolio My blog: http://guyzinger.wordpress.com/

09-04-2012, 01:05 PM	#2
Umar6419 Registered User Join Date: Mar 2012 Posts: 3 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Hey you are going great.,,, Add inbetweens

10-04-2012, 05:45 AM	#3
picpoc Registered User Join Date: Mar 2012 Location: Australia Posts: 9 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	hi, looks good to me though i'm no animator. On thing that kind of looks odd to me is that first camera move. I think the first shot could be wider to differentiate it from the second one. Also probably could add couple more cuts, camera changes, to keep the sequence dynamic.

21-05-2012, 06:48 PM	#8
ladokar Registered User Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 8 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Here is the new version after working more on the shots...wish to have good critiques https://sites.google.com/site/ladoka...t-2d-animation thanks in advance __________________ http://artistsdirectory.blogspot.com/ Last edited by ladokar; 22-05-2012 at 03:04 AM..

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