Animatic for Short Animation

[denty]

http://www.vimeo.com/23906716

hey just wondering what people think to this?

Not going to tell you the story i want to see if people can understand whats happening

its not animated just animatic

also how do you embed videos on here??

[squeak]

looks good!

didn't quite get the story. What's happening at the end?

[denty]

Workflow for this animatic just Photoshop and premier pro

[Bob Marley]

I love your color palette, Its looking great so far, but as squeak I dont really get the biggining and ending connection..... hmmm
I dont think you can embed video on that forum, but try to put it aswell on 11sec club to have as much feedback as you can, looking forward for more.
Just thought aswell, maybe you could ad another angle, after he puts his hand it the water, have a view from the boat seeing the house getting reavealed thru the smoke as he approaches, just an idea, otherwise having the boat hitting the house to make a surprise works aswell.

[denty]

Cheers for the advice I like the idea of the shot you meantioned. Once I have finished uni I think I will take this further and fix the storyboard and continue making this in 3ds max or maya. But I would still keep the painted style.

[chubu]

I have to admit that the story was really not clear to me at all. I didn't understand anything .
for a story to be good you need to have a beginning, middle and end, also the main character should evolve in a way during this movie.
I think the beginning was OK, the time that he goes on the platform(?) is way to fast and I didn't understand the ending

My only advice to you is do not touch any 3d program until you have tied the story to the best you can. I think right now youre about 50-60% there.

But hey, what do I know!? :P

[sam1216]

that was awesome