Elf alike female, need crits

ofitiu · 08-09-2005, 04:44 PM

Hi there. This is my first post here. I created a female creature, that looks like a elf. I need some help finishing it. Hope you can see whats wrong and how could i do some improvements. thanks.

merlyn · 08-09-2005, 05:08 PM

the lips look very inflated, along with the boobs. (reminds me lola ferrari)

-pull the corner of the lips to the back of the head.
-the ears are too far out and need pushing in.
-and maybe round the chin a little.

Keep going.. what does the rest of the model look like?

ofitiu · 09-09-2005, 01:02 AM

Hi merlyn, thanks for the quick response and for you're sugestions. Unfortunately i could not aplied them all on my model, but i've pushed the ears in, and i made the boobs smaller. Please tell me what you think now. I also attachet a image with the rest of the body. If you wold have some sugestions there too please tell me. Thanks

Mr. Bluesummers-3DT · 09-09-2005, 01:14 AM

Critique
Looks like you've put a lot of work into this model. I like the changes you've made to the face- they're big steps in the right direction.

Firstly, consider posting some alternate views. Perhaps a perspective view and a side view (if time permits). My recommendation would be to put some work into the eyes, since they're classically the first place people turn to for realism and emotion. They could use slightly more defined eyelids to add to the realism of the face. The eye texture is smart, but if you're looking for that extra edge, consider building the eye-ball out of various parts. Perhaps it would be possible to create more realistic eyelashes per this tutorial through the use of splines for each lash instead of alpha-mapped planar objects.

Consider these changes, and hit us back with your updates!
Good luck,

merlyn · 09-09-2005, 04:55 AM

The neck seems a little wide, and the hips need to be wider.
Use this as reference.

inveni0 · 09-09-2005, 05:01 AM

The eyes should be closer together. And don't use that pic as a reference. The body style is totally not what you're going for. You should get your references out of Maxim or something. Also, you need to make the skin texture on the torso less splotchy...unless she has some kind of disease.

ofitiu · 09-09-2005, 09:26 PM

BlueSummers - I took your advice and defined the eyelids. Then I rndered a perspective view as you sugested. The Eyeball is made out of 2 parts, not just one sphere, as you can see in the second image. About the eyelashes, at first i've made eyelashes like the tutorial you gave me, but i was not satisfied because thei didnt look like they had enough volume, i adpted those eyelashes for the new eyelids. Take a look, maibe you can see wats the problem with those, i couldn't. Please tell me if you can see were are the problems.

Merlin - I made the neck thiner. Take a look at the 4th image. For the hips i didn't understant wich part exactly should be more wide. Please tell me if i made the modification corectly.

Inveni0 - i brought the eyes closer to another, but just a bit (4th image), if it needs more please tell me. I also reduced the intensity of the spots (5th image).

Thanks guys for replies, you helped me alot, if you have more ideeas please tell me.

08-09-2005, 04:44 PM	#1
ofitiu Registered User Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 97 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Elf alike female, need crits Hi there. This is my first post here. I created a female creature, that looks like a elf. I need some help finishing it. Hope you can see whats wrong and how could i do some improvements. thanks.

08-09-2005, 05:08 PM	#2
merlyn Registered User Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Manchester, England Posts: 427 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	the lips look very inflated, along with the boobs. (reminds me lola ferrari) -pull the corner of the lips to the back of the head. -the ears are too far out and need pushing in. -and maybe round the chin a little. Keep going.. what does the rest of the model look like? __________________ http://www.merlynlear.com/index.htm

09-09-2005, 01:02 AM	#3
ofitiu Registered User Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 97 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	The rest of the model Hi merlyn, thanks for the quick response and for you're sugestions. Unfortunately i could not aplied them all on my model, but i've pushed the ears in, and i made the boobs smaller. Please tell me what you think now. I also attachet a image with the rest of the body. If you wold have some sugestions there too please tell me. Thanks

09-09-2005, 01:14 AM	#4
Mr. Bluesummers-3DT Supplies Coordinator Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: United States Posts: 3,343 Thanks: 0 Thanked 11 Times in 8 Posts Awards Showcase Total Awards: 8	Critique Looks like you've put a lot of work into this model. I like the changes you've made to the face- they're big steps in the right direction. Firstly, consider posting some alternate views. Perhaps a perspective view and a side view (if time permits). My recommendation would be to put some work into the eyes, since they're classically the first place people turn to for realism and emotion. They could use slightly more defined eyelids to add to the realism of the face. The eye texture is smart, but if you're looking for that extra edge, consider building the eye-ball out of various parts. Perhaps it would be possible to create more realistic eyelashes per this tutorial through the use of splines for each lash instead of alpha-mapped planar objects. Consider these changes, and hit us back with your updates! Good luck, __________________ Be sure to check out my blog because there's tons of useful resources there: Free 3dsMax Video Tutorials 3dsMax Tutorials and Articles 3dsMax Downloads and Scripts Last edited by Mr. Bluesummers-3DT; 09-09-2005 at 01:16 AM..

09-09-2005, 04:55 AM	#5
merlyn Registered User Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Manchester, England Posts: 427 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	The neck seems a little wide, and the hips need to be wider. Use this as reference. __________________ http://www.merlynlear.com/index.htm

09-09-2005, 05:01 AM	#6
inveni0 Man of the Hour Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Why right here, of course... Posts: 6,806 Thanks: 40 Thanked 35 Times in 31 Posts Awards Showcase Total Awards: 5	The eyes should be closer together. And don't use that pic as a reference. The body style is totally not what you're going for. You should get your references out of Maxim or something. Also, you need to make the skin texture on the torso less splotchy...unless she has some kind of disease. __________________ The Easter Bunny is a MONSTER! - It's Out!

09-09-2005, 09:26 PM	#7
ofitiu Registered User Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 97 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	re BlueSummers - I took your advice and defined the eyelids. Then I rndered a perspective view as you sugested. The Eyeball is made out of 2 parts, not just one sphere, as you can see in the second image. About the eyelashes, at first i've made eyelashes like the tutorial you gave me, but i was not satisfied because thei didnt look like they had enough volume, i adpted those eyelashes for the new eyelids. Take a look, maibe you can see wats the problem with those, i couldn't. Please tell me if you can see were are the problems. Merlin - I made the neck thiner. Take a look at the 4th image. For the hips i didn't understant wich part exactly should be more wide. Please tell me if i made the modification corectly. Inveni0 - i brought the eyes closer to another, but just a bit (4th image), if it needs more please tell me. I also reduced the intensity of the spots (5th image). Thanks guys for replies, you helped me alot, if you have more ideeas please tell me.

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