I'm a begginer but would like some critics...

Gypsyhunter · 19-03-2003, 12:05 AM

Hello there! I started doing animation about 5 months ago. Im 17 and hope to persue this as a career, because i love it so much! Well i would like some critics on these scenes i have done. Please keep in mind that i am new

thanx!

Abandoned shack....

Mushroom Village...

lockdown2000 · 19-03-2003, 01:03 AM

Well first off welcome!
second off your a junior in HS right.? so am I. and I love 3d also

Thridly:
Your work looks very nice. Need some work with the textures, but all in all you have nice models. I have been trying to dump STANDARD procedural mapping for along time in hopes to create my own textures and slap those on.

For the images:
The house:
I dont really see a horizon line. looks like the grass just "stops" and then the sky appears. the well seeing as its closest, would need a lot bettertextures, and modeling. Right now its wayyy to clean. break it up and slap some crooked nails into it. THat rope, unweave it a little with textures and alpha maped textures to give transparency on the threads.apply a bump map the the bricks, or harder but much more visually appealing (personall) take a cube, deform like 3 diff versions and "build that well, that apply textures. instead of having a cylinder itself. The house need works with textures as well. There are a lot of good text tutorials at www.3dtotal.com You have done some nice grass, and by the looks of the house etc, some dead grass and patched of no grass might help.

The mushroom village:
I see the same texture on all mushroom, that a wee bit lame. Why is EVERYONE in the village awake at night? Again I see no horizon. Just the cliffs end and the sky starts. some vegetation here and there would be nice as well. maybe some rocks. and then the moon should be casting some light. lastly the fire isnt creating any shadows....? hehe...

ok then
keep going, and try the Joan Of Arc tutorial, and Karabo's Car tutorial, those will give you a WORLD of 3d help.
bye.

Gypsyhunter · 19-03-2003, 11:50 PM

thanks a bunch! I love hard critics! seriously i do, i think thats how i learn the best. thanks a lot and i will definitly take the things you said into consideration. thanks again!

lockdown2000 · 20-03-2003, 01:14 AM

thats why we have forums

19-03-2003, 12:05 AM	#1
Gypsyhunter Registered User Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: america Posts: 9 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	I'm a begginer but would like some critics... Hello there! I started doing animation about 5 months ago. Im 17 and hope to persue this as a career, because i love it so much! Well i would like some critics on these scenes i have done. Please keep in mind that i am new thanx! Abandoned shack.... Mushroom Village... __________________ i will rule the world someday...

19-03-2003, 11:50 PM	#3
Gypsyhunter Registered User Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: america Posts: 9 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	thank you thank you thanks a bunch! I love hard critics! seriously i do, i think thats how i learn the best. thanks a lot and i will definitly take the things you said into consideration. thanks again! __________________ i will rule the world someday...

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19-03-2003, 01:03 AM	#2
lockdown2000 Registered User Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 213 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Well first off welcome! second off your a junior in HS right.? so am I. and I love 3d also Thridly: Your work looks very nice. Need some work with the textures, but all in all you have nice models. I have been trying to dump STANDARD procedural mapping for along time in hopes to create my own textures and slap those on. For the images: The house: I dont really see a horizon line. looks like the grass just "stops" and then the sky appears. the well seeing as its closest, would need a lot bettertextures, and modeling. Right now its wayyy to clean. break it up and slap some crooked nails into it. THat rope, unweave it a little with textures and alpha maped textures to give transparency on the threads.apply a bump map the the bricks, or harder but much more visually appealing (personall) take a cube, deform like 3 diff versions and "build that well, that apply textures. instead of having a cylinder itself. The house need works with textures as well. There are a lot of good text tutorials at www.3dtotal.com You have done some nice grass, and by the looks of the house etc, some dead grass and patched of no grass might help. The mushroom village: I see the same texture on all mushroom, that a wee bit lame. Why is EVERYONE in the village awake at night? Again I see no horizon. Just the cliffs end and the sky starts. some vegetation here and there would be nice as well. maybe some rocks. and then the moon should be casting some light. lastly the fire isnt creating any shadows....? hehe... ok then keep going, and try the Joan Of Arc tutorial, and Karabo's Car tutorial, those will give you a WORLD of 3d help. bye.

20-03-2003, 01:14 AM	#4
lockdown2000 Registered User Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 213 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	thats why we have forums

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